I’m spending a soggy morning studying scribbled comments on a story I read at a recent ninevoices’ gathering.
There was one description – of a workman on a ladder – that elicited so many opposing views (talk about a Celtic and Rangers match!) that I asked people write ‘yes’ or ‘no’ in the margin.
This was the result: (You know who you are, people!)
No. (with a suggested alternative)
Yes! (with two ticks)
Yes! (underlined) plus the comment ‘For heaven’s sake do NOT (underlined) lose this.
My cat has just strolled over the page and deposited a muddy paw print on the contentious paragraph, which may suggest a further ‘no’, though she isn’t officially a member of our group.
HOWEVER – this demonstrates how differently we all view the written word. Had this been a group of agents considering a submission it might have resulted in three requests for the full manuscript.
I will sleep on what to do, though I’m quite attached to my description and do have a majority on my side. If I ignore the cat…